Not bad.
I have to admit, it was pretty slow paced. The conversations were very plain ad nauseam. I stopped reading them about halfway through. Oh, and an FYI - (IIRC) the reason Final Fantasy is called Final Fantasy is that the creator had made several games before and they had all been horrible flops, so when he created FF, if it didn't succeed, he was going to quit, therefore it was his Final Fantasy. Of course we know it became immensly popular. Anyways, that's the story behind that. Good job overall.
~Wedge Talon~
Insurrection Games
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